Mar 05
I don’t know why I didn’t try to fix this a long time ago, but here’s my first attempt at improving the ending of chapter one. I still kept in the old one and the strip where my sister tells me it stinks. But this follows immediately afterward. Let me know what you all think. My sister said it was okay, but she just got up so she’s not really awake yet.
much improved
still, the cutaway felt sudden, and a little cheap, as in “Thank goodness that’s over with, even though you never get to see how we dealt with it.”
But for a quickie fix it works.
yeah, it would’ve been nice to redo it completely. But like you said, it works for a quick fix and only took me a short time to do, and left plenty of time to work on the next comic. So that’s good at least.
I’m not sure which one is better. The art on B is better of course, it being the more recent one, but the dialog seems to play slightly differently. Ok, what I missed about the new one was the mention of the froofy drinks with the umbrella. I’m silly
Yes, I like that line about the froofy drinks, but there wasn’t room. But it’s still there in the original page, even in the Wowio books. I’ve left the original ending in with the subtitle, “too abrubt.” and then the page where my sister compares it to a disappointing, anticlimactic anime ending (see actually said that and I liked my shirt with the super sheep). Then I have the new ending page after that with another subtitle, “Let’s try this again…”
I just kind of liked the idea of keeping the original in there and making a joke out of it.