Feb 27
[Edit: Thanks to SEA, I realized that even though I knew that the counsel tower was monstrously high, as indeed most the building are (it is a scifi after all and I love monster skyscrapers), nobody else knew that because I hadn't thought to mention it. So I added some interior monologue giving that fact, and conveniently thought one of my favorite Pratchett references that would fit perfectly. Aside from that, I really love how the color version came out.]
Incidentally, this wasn’t in the original script. This was one of those moments that came to me a few nights ago when working on writing the next part of the story. I’ve been reading a book called The Anatomy of Story by John Truby, which is an awesome book on writing by the way, and one of the exercises was to make up a wish list of all the things you’d like to see in one of your stories. The idea is to go all out and omit nothing. As I was doing that I realized that I wanted to see more of the Dark Lords of the Sheep. For those that missed it you can find the Weird Interlude featuring them here. I love the cybersheep. And suddenly this little moment came to me. The bird was actually a last minute thing that seemed to just top it off in randomness. It’s been a while since we’ve had a truly random moment. The British slang was because I totally watch too much Doctor Who and I just think the expression is so funny. Did anyone see this coming? And what of the green chicken? We’ll have to wait and see.
By the way, this month marks the third anniversary of TFR. It is officially three years old. Let’s go for four.
Still falling eh? Must be another one of those super high rise
Yup. Tallest building in the city. And there’s some pretty tall buildings. So it’s a really long drop.
O ho ho! THE SHEEP HAVE RETURNED!
Now I’m putting my proofreader’s hat on: The second sentence on this page refers to “what it focuses on,” and the fact that the “it” must refer to the “mental focus” really doesn’t work well. Just try swapping out the pronoun: it comes out “what mental focus focuses on.” Nuh-uh. Or, one could substitute “you” for the pronoun: “what you focuses on.” Even worse!
I’d suggest saying “what you focus on … that you’re going to leave” as a substitute.
/proofreading
Keep having fun, Ger!
Ooo! Thanks for the proofreading. Let me fix that. I always need a little help in that direction.
There. Fixed it. You’re write. It reads much better that way.
Ok, its 5am. I should say you’re right. It reads much better.
@Bartimaeus Yes, I felt it was about time the dark sheep showed up again.
I agree, the effect is much more clear and dramatic with the inner monologue. ^^ Wonderful touch!
XD The cyborg sheep! YES. I love those guys! I’m glad you decided to throw in another cameo of them!
The green chicken…I don’t even know. It definitely accomplishes the task of a totally random moment! XD
Once again, the colors are looking wonderful. ^^ I wonder if the cyborg sheep have an actual purpose to the plotline of the comic, or if they are there out of sheer randomousity and awesomeness? Like adding salt to the macaroni & cheese, not out of necessity, but because it enhances the flavor just so.
Oh good. I was hoping the monologue would improve it. I’d like to do a little more narrative. My favorite type of humor is the British Wodehouse/Pratchett/Hitchhiker’s Guide style of narrative, which is hard to do in a comic without having a sort of narrative in captions. I want to do more of that.
But I love the Dark Lords of the Sheep. I even like the name. Or nigh-psychotic cyber sheep. It’s all them. But beware. There is a madness to my madness or rather my method. Or something. As for the role of the cyber sheep, we’ll just have to wait and see, but they’re definitely like seasoning. Too much of them is no good, but a dash here or there is perfect.
Harken to the Dark Lord of the Sheep! He will guide you in … well, a direction. o.0
Yay for randomness (especially of a green chicken)!
This is the great thing about falling – the only real problem is the sudden stop at the end.
Just in case, did you mean “counsel tower” or “council tower”? There is a difference… Great comic, by the way!
Oh snap! Thanks for catching that one. That’s the third time I’ve let counsel slip for council.
Fixed it!